TRANSLATING AMIR KHUSRAW (1)

Original

Amîr Khusraw is not much translated, but there is a pleasing rendering by Hadi Hasan: the first five lines run: {1}

O you whose beautiful face is the envy of the idols of Azar
You remain superior to my praise.
All over the world have I traveled;
many a maiden’s love have I tasted;
Many a beauty-star have I seen; but you are something unique.

Word-For-Word Rendering

We undertake a word-for-word translation, using dictionaries {6} {7} {8} {9} and grammars as necessary: {10} {11} {12} Thackston's book provides the Farsi text, {3} which I have taken as correct ( Hasan's seems a shortened version.)

Persian Metre

Why, when it's so complicated, should we bother with Persian prosody? Well, apart from the aesthetics, the pleasure of reading the poem properly, the sense often cannot be safely established without the scansion. There are three reasons for this. Firstly, the normal word order is often inverted. Secondly, the possesive  izâfa, the unwritten i syllable is counted in the scansion, which  tells us what refers to what. And thirdly, because the short vowels are not commonly shown, the same word as written can have different pronunciations and meanings, most particularly with verbs. In short, the word-for-word approach of the previous tables breaks down, and we can imagine ambiguities or meanings that do not exist.

A very brief summary of prosody follows, I hope sufficient to explain the table below. Readers who want more are referred to Wheeler Thackston's excellent treatment, from which these notes are taken. {3}

1. The sh ch kh etc. consonants count as one consonant. Likewise w and y in the diphthongs aw and ay. The n plus another consonant is counted as one consonant.

2. The a i and u vowels are short. The â î ê ô and û vowels are long.

3. The word-ending a and the final u in tu or chu etc. can be long or short as the metre demands. The same flexibility applies to the izâfa, and to the unemphasized a and u following words (enclictics).

4. The initial glottal stop ('a) may be elided or attach itself to the last consonant of the proceeding word and be counted as a full syllable. Glottal stops within words, or between vowels, are not elided.

5. Several syllables may be contracted, eg. vâv to v, vagar to var, dîegar to digar, buguzarîn to bugzarîn, ki to k, ki-at to kat, pidar-ash to pidar'sh, a-a to a, the final âh to ah, and khvâst to khâst. Rhyme can cause the last to be 'heard' as a double syllable when the st is followed by a short vowel.

6. Persian metres are patterns of long and short elements. The short element is a consonant followed by a short vowel: Cv. The long elements may be a consonant followed by a long vowel (CV) or consonant followed by short vowel followed by consonant CvC.

7. Anomalous elements not conforming to CV, CV or Cvc have to 'resolved' or treated in the following ways.

a. With CVC or CvCC, the last C is attached the vowel of the following word, or (where the following word starts with a consonant) an extra syllable is intoduced (nîm-fatha, ë, unpronounced but sensed in the reading). Dast becomes das-të and dâd becomes dâ-dë.

b. With CVCC, the last C is attached to the initial vowel of the following word: CVCC v becomes CVC CV, and the penultimate C becomes Cë with a nîm-fatha. The CVCC word then reads CV Cë CV If no vowel follows, however, the nîm-fatha is added and the anomalous CVC simply treated as a long element: CVCC becomes CVC Cë.

c. An overlong syllable at the end of a hemistich is not resolved (but simply indicated as ±).

8. Some 70 metres exist, all patterns of the three elements CV, CV and Cvc

Two final points. Lines are stand-alone independent entities in the ghazal or qasida. Poems therefore seem somewhat artificial, a series of short statements held together by form, meter and rhyme rather than by clauses or binding emotion. Secondly, Persian poetry was intensely conservative, even stereotyped, seeking refinement of existing convention more than innovation. Craftsmanship was emphasized, and its poets read and memorized thousands of lines before venturing to write their own. Our rendering has to reflect these matters.

Idols of Azar

Wheeler Thackston gives us the scansion for this poem. The first line runs:

A decent grammar book {11} tells us which syllables are intrinsically stressed in Persian (the italics in the line above shows where these syllables may be both stressed or unstressed).

The name of the metre ( in fact muzâri' akhrab sâlim makfûf sâlim) doesn't matter, but we can use it to correct any uncertainty or missed izâfa because a. the metre has to be kept to, and b. pairs of hemistichs must have the same number of syllables. So:

We have found a few izâfas, and see that marv in line 4b is not the city Merv but the negative imperative of raftan: do not go. We start with a word-for-word rendering:

1. O face of beauty you jealousy of idols of Azar
every many descriptions I make in beauty from that much more adorning

2. Ever you blessed in sight picture from vision more beautiful
houri I do not know O youth son of Adam unless a fairy

3. Horizon if I see love of idols I experience
many beauties I see but you thing other

4. O ease and rest life notwithstanding tall and how elegant flowing
from this manner go not avoid task of my life you escape with

5. Determination spectacle made outset waited have
life and heart as long as this is custom of pomp

6. Universe all very plunder you very creator fitting O you
that narcissus of freshness you professed a religion of infidelity

7. Khusraw humble is and beggar befallen in city of you
ought to have who for the sake of God towards humble for another

A literal, semi-prose rendering might be:

1. You whose face makes jealous the idols of Azar
Whatever description I make your beauty exceeds.

2. You are a picture from a vision, unreal
and beautiful to sons of Adam as are the houris.

3. If I scour the horizon I see many beauties
and have known them: you are something different.

4. Continue in this manner, be my life-task, moving gracefully,
my ease and rest that you escape with notwithstanding.

5. From the outset my heart and life have been set,
a spectacle but as the custom is to splendour

6. You create the very universe you plunder, make
of narcissus freshness a faith in infidelity.

7. Khusraw is humble, fallen a beggar in your city:
for the sake of God you should be humble to another.

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